Juliet's time at the swimming pool

This week Juliet has been learning to write a recount on her time at the swimming pool.

Learning intention

I am learning to write a hook[an exciting beginning] that captures audience intention leaves.

Hurray! as I shouted when I went down the slide, my brother wanted me to go down the slide again but I didn't want to because  when I went down I bumped my head on to the wall because my brother pushed me when i was in front of him.But then I was still happy because  when  I was feeling alright  I wanted to go on the slide again.But then I said to my mum can we just stay for 30 seconds please  and she said yes because I was